Just a couple of nitpicky things - I really don't like the thought of 'Myfanway' rhyming with 'Tiffany'. I'm part Welsh, so for me, it's the Welsh pronunciation all the way.
And I know it's an alternate universe, but it's still a British alternate universe, which means it's 'football', not 'soccer'.
But that's just me being super-picky. I'm thoroughly enjoying this.