Ack. The love triangle is completely unnecessary. The story could hold up quite easily without it. And I'm getting rather fed up with hearing about Ash's eyes. Yeah, they're amazing. I get it. They're also wondrous, beautiful, mesmerizing and every other fucking word in the thesaurus.
The world building is a bit weak. It's supposed to be steampunk, but I need more than a few references to airships and a bit of clockwork gadgetry to make it come alive. And talking of clockwork; "...metal armor fully encased [the cat's] left back leg and shoulder,..." Hmm, I'm not quite sure how the shoulder thing works, but we then get, "The cat climbed onto her lap, placed a paw on either side of her neck, one warm and alive, the other chilly brass,..." Huh? Since when did it have a mechanical front leg? Am I missing something here?
And 'bollocks' is a fantastic word (I use it a lot). But it needs to be used properly or you just sound silly.